A group of writers in Chichester coming together once a month for inspiration, collaboration and sensation

A Fallen Face

Long distance runner

Finish second place silver

Fallen face for now

On wet autumn track

Body burning, muscles ache

The scent of wet leaves

Months of preparing

Confidence has been regained

Now take stance, ready.


About mauledbypuma

5 Foot 5, Left handed, Aquarius, Human being.

2 comments on “A Fallen Face

  1. Peronius
    July 19, 2012

    Thanks for teaching us about Haiku with your nice example. Although I’d seen Haiku before, I enjoyed the experience of trying to write it, which was new to me. However, according to the Wikipedia article on Haiku, the 5-7-5 pattern does not map exactly to English syllables. It would be interesting to delve more deeply into this some time in the future, and you’ve definitely started something, i suspect.

  2. mauledbypuma
    July 19, 2012

    You’re welcome!

    To be fair I don’t think English haikus will ever be exactly the same as Japanese haikus. I just like experimenting with the form because it makes a writer focus on a specific set of requirements such as the 5-7-5 pattern.

    This is more of, dare I say, a proper haiku than I usually do because it also includes a sense of season (Autumn) and a sensory reference (the smell of wet leaves). I just used to do the 5-7-5 thing and left it at that.

    Well this is the first haiku I’ve done for at least a couple of months so I’m glad people liked it! I hope to do many more and to see what everyone else comes up with.

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